I want to write... plz tell me if they suck...
Posted by an anonymous user on 8/24/2008 2:40:00 PM
My Soul
Take a left at ambition
It’s easy enough to see
Follow the path by the fountain of love
Go strait on through my memories
Ignore the sea of doubt and fear
Go right where the road forks
To stay bitter or to forgive
And jump the wall of hurt and pain
Into the garden of my soul
You’ll see God standing next to me
In the place of all my dreams
Go through the forest of long lost things
And soon you’ll find my heart
Tread softly when you make your way
Don’t wake my sleeping thoughts
This is me, my heart and soul
Kindness is the key
To open up the door you see
To all things yet to be
Live Life For All Its Worth
Let it fall like rain
Let the load fall
Live for life and the present alone
Stories speak of the future
And books speak of the past
But you need only worry about one time
One place
One life
One life to live
Live it for all its worth
Fear not the future
Remember the past
See only the present
Your part will come to pass
(i dont really like this one...)
So shine the eyes of broken hearts
Here stands the lonely star
After suns are long and gone
Known to go long and far
Even when the path is hard
So stands the bravest soul
Peering out of a broken shell
Ever will we stand
All to love and all to fear
Read this and know your soul
End this rhyme and feel the peace knowing who you are.
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Take a left at ambition
It’s easy enough to see
Follow the path by the fountain of love
Go strait on through my memories
Ignore the sea of doubt and fear
Go right where the road forks
To stay bitter or to forgive
And jump the wall of hurt and pain
Into the garden of my soul
You’ll see God standing next to me
In the place of all my dreams
Go through the forest of long lost things
And soon you’ll find my heart
Tread softly when you make your way
Don’t wake my sleeping thoughts
This is me, my heart and soul
Kindness is the key
To open up the door you see
To all things yet to be
Live Life For All Its Worth
Let it fall like rain
Let the load fall
Live for life and the present alone
Stories speak of the future
And books speak of the past
But you need only worry about one time
One place
One life
One life to live
Live it for all its worth
Fear not the future
Remember the past
See only the present
Your part will come to pass
(i dont really like this one...)
So shine the eyes of broken hearts
Here stands the lonely star
After suns are long and gone
Known to go long and far
Even when the path is hard
So stands the bravest soul
Peering out of a broken shell
Ever will we stand
All to love and all to fear
Read this and know your soul
End this rhyme and feel the peace knowing who you are.
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I like the parts of your song, images you create;
like - "here stands the lonely star" for example.
You need to work on rhyme, and some other things,
but you have it. And I just know when someone has it
or has it not. And you have it!
like - "here stands the lonely star" for example.
You need to work on rhyme, and some other things,
but you have it. And I just know when someone has it
or has it not. And you have it!
Posted by an anonymous user on 8/25/2008 3:13:00 AM (Report abuse)
Wow! You are very talented. These are very moving to me. Keep writing, you have a gift.
Posted by an anonymous user on 8/25/2008 12:58:00 AM (Report abuse)
I think it's great. You're a terrific writer. Keep it up. =]
Posted by RokkuRii on 8/25/2008 12:08:00 AM (Report abuse)